D#6, HW#10 - Grammar Assignment

The following AB’s were rewritten with focus on removing comma splices and fused sentences. This is the hardest and needs most improvement area for my writing. I believe I did very well ensuring these two key items were addressed as needed in the following AB’s.

Bailey, Eric. (2004, March 9). The State; Giving New Meaning to 'Youth Vote'; A state senator says he wants to change the California Constitution to allow teens as young as 14 to cast ballots. The proposal is met with ridicule.:[HOME EDITION]. The Los Angeles Times. Retrieved on July 16, 2007 from ProQuest Database.

A California State Senator John Vasconcellos (D-Santa Clara) proposed to lower the voting age to 14. However, this proposal was met with strong opposition by Senator Ross Johnson (R- Irvine) & Bob Stern, president of the Center for Governmental Studies in Los Angeles, both stating in various terms that this proposal was outrageous. The article also refers to Germany & Austria having already lowered their voting age to allow teens to vote. This article will help establish three points: different perspectives for, against and those who have already lowered the voting age. This article also relates to at least one other article regarding other countries lowering the voting age. I was glad I finally found another article that had opinions that are against lowering the voting age which will help address another viewpoint.

Current Events, a Weekly Reader publication. (2004, September 24). Sufferin' for suffrage: should teens have the right to vote? Retrieved July 10, 2007 from Access My Library database.

This article refers to adolescents that are being provided with voting awareness in the critical years prior to college, which will hopefully increase voter turn out during elections. Unfortunately, the author is unknown. This makes the article less credible. However, the article is published through an organization that promotes education skills and materials towards teachers. A possible quote to refer to: "If you can get young adults to cast a ballot in one of their first two or three elections, you increase the likelihood that they'll [vote] regularly. If you miss that first window, you'll probably lose them," said Tom Patterson, head of the Vanishing Voter Project, an organization devoted to increasing voter turnout.