D#11, HW#1 - Posted reply to D#10, HW#2

First Review:
These two sentences are the last sentence in my opening and closing paragraphs. The first sentence is my thesis outlined and the second sentence is my concluding thesis. Neither of these sentences contradicts each other; in fact they compliment each other.

A few reasons why the state of Arizona should reconsider lowering the voting to 16 is educational opportunities, increase in voter turnout rates, and stronger communities.

The voting age in Arizona should be lowered from 18 to 16 because youths have better opportunities to learn about voting, establish early voting habit(s) increasing voter turnout and strengthen the communities they live in.

Second Review:
There are several sections to my paper outlined as follows:

Reasons for lowering the voting age in Arizona
Educational Exposure or Experience opportunities
Politicians providing educational opportunities
Organizations providing educational opportunities
Politicians and organizations promoting awareness
Other countries have lowered voting age
My experience with voting
Voter turnout statistics
Communities – need to emphasize ‘strengthening’
Conclusion on Arizona lowering voting age

After this review, I may need to refocus on how I’ve arranged my arguments. It appears the strongest one is at the top with three sections to itself.

Third Review:
Two of my paragraphs subpoints were not clear and one was implying to the main point. However, I revised the following opening sentences:

Additionally, as politicians and organizations promote awareness with voting and actively participating within communities, there are even more educational opportunities that the state of Arizona could take advantage of.

Since 1982, the electoral participation (voter turnout) across the nation has declined among 18 to 29 year olds (Kirby, E., Lopez, M., & Marcelo, K. 2007).

Today’s teenagers are actively participating in and strengthening their communities by showing what they are capable of.

Fourth Review:

A few reasons why the state of Arizona should reconsider lowering the voting age to 16 is educational opportunities, increase in voter turnout rates, and stronger communities. Through further educational exposure or experience, some politicians and organizations have assisted youths on their quest to lower the voting age and receiving education they may otherwise not have had the opportunity. In addition, organizations such as Kids Voting USA (KVUSA, 2007) and National Youth Rights Association (NYRA, 2007) have contributed immensely to the current awareness on educational importance and youth activism in Arizona, as well as across the nation. Additionally, as politicians and organizations promote awareness with voting and actively participating within communities, there are even more educational opportunities that the state of Arizona could take advantage of. Furthermore, for certain types of elections, several countries, such as Brazil, Cuba, East Timor, Germany, Israel, Isle of Man, Nicaragua, and Slovenia have lowered their voting age to 16 or 17 (Voting, 2007). My experience with Arizona voting, just six years prior to 1994, was non-existent because I was scared to vote when I turned 18. Since 1982, the electoral participation (voter turnout) across the nation has declined among 18 to 29 year olds (Kirby, E., Lopez, M., & Marcelo, K. 2007). Today’s teenagers are actively participating in and strengthening their communities by showing what they are capable of. The voting age in Arizona should be lowered from 18 to 16 because youths have better opportunities to learn about voting, establish early voting habit(s) increasing voter turnout and strengthen the communities they live in.